Skip to comments.Gangway Or Sickbay. You Decide.
Posted on 02/16/2013 3:35:33 PM PST by Absolutely Nobama
Take a break from looking for black helicopters, fellow extremists! It's Short-Story-With-A-Point Time!
A couple of years from now, in a suburb near you...or perhaps the suburb you live in....
It was a cold November morning. Jack hated the cold. The sharp cold air reminded him rather rudely that he no longer had a left leg. The doctors had warned him that his phantom limb pain would be worse in the winter. I do not have time for this. Pain is simply weakness leaving the body, Jack thought as he attached his prosthetic leg.
Jack was going to be busy all day. He had a meeting with the chef he partnered with to open his restaurant. She wanted to name the place "Chesty's", after Marine Corps hero Chesty Puller. Jack wasn't thrilled with the idea. Although he was decorated for many acts of bravery while serving in Iraq and Afghanistan as an infantry officer in the United States Marine Corps, he never talked about it. It wasn't that he suffered from post-traumatic stress disorder, nor was he ashamed of anything he or his men did. Jack always felt that the War on Terror was a noble endeavor that he was proud to have been a part of. He simply wanted to be known as a restauranteur, not a war hero. After his meeting, he was going to meet a few purveyors and pick up his son Tyler at school, and then drop him off at his mother's apartment. Then he would head to the restaurant and hopefully finish painting the place before he had to pick up Tyler again.
As Jack headed towards his beat up Ford Ranger, his cell phone rang. Little did Jack know what kind of havoc this phone call would cause.
"Mr. Slater ?"
"Yeah, this Jack Slater," Jack replied while lighting a cigarette.
"My name is Maxine Ojeda. I'm your son's principal. I need you come down here as soon as possible. We need to talk."
"What did he do ?"
"This is a very serious matter, Mister Slater. I urgently need to speak to you, and I need to do so face to face."
"No problem," Jack said ending the call.
Jack then dialed his ex-wife, Charlene. Perhaps she knew what was going on.
"Yes, Jack ?" she responded coldly.
"Did you get a call from Tyler's principal ?"
"As a matter of fact, I did, Jack. I'm heading over there now. Will you be gracing us with your presence, or will this just be Mommy to the rescue yet again ?"
"Yet again ? Charlene, you haven't been--"
"Not now. I'll see you at the school," Charlene rebutted huffily as she ended the call.
On the way to the school, Jack's mind was racing. Tyler had never been in trouble before. He had always done well in school. He was a pleasant little boy who played Little League. If one was to look up the definition of "well adjusted", a picture of Tyler Slater would be found next to the definition.
Both Jack and Charlene pulled up to the school at the same time and parked next to each other. They exchanged muted greetings as they headed to towards the front door where a security guard with a badge that read "Department of Education Security Team" awaited them. They said nothing as the security guard checked their picture ID's and waved his metal detector around them. The guard then gave them directions to the principal's office.
"Boy, things have changed since we went here, huh ?" Jack whispered to Charlene as they headed towards the office. Charlene rolled her eyes in annoyance instead of answering him. Of the many, many things Charlene hated about Jack, the thing she hated most about him was, as she put it, his desire to live in the past.
Jack and Charlene arrived at the waiting area outside of the principal's office to find Tyler sitting there. The little boy's face was red and he was sobbing. He looked up to see his parents.
"I didn't do anything," the boy mumbled.
"We'll talk later, Squirt."
Jack and Charlene entered Principal Ojeda's office and was surprised to find not only the principal, but another woman as well.
"Mr. and Mrs. Slater---"
"I changed my name back to Watson," Charlene interrupted as she shook the principal's hand.
"My apologies. I'm Maxine Ojeda. This is Theresa McDermott, our school psychologist. Please, have a seat."
Jack and Charlene sat as far as possible from each other on Principal Ojeda's couch. As Jack sat, his pant leg rode up, exposing his prosthetic leg slightly. Principal Ojeda couldn't help but briefly stare. Jack quickly caught on and fixed his pant leg.
"Let's get started," Principal Ojeda began. "Tyler's teacher, Mrs. Parks, gave her class an assignment: Draw a picture of a person you most admire and present it to the class. Most of the students drew a picture of Barack Obama, some drew pictures of sports heroes, some drew super heroes, and your son drew this."
Principal Ojeda handed Jack a picture of a green stick figure with a gun shooting at other stick figures. On the bottom of the picture, it read "My Dad".
"So ?" Jack responded, handing the picture back to principal.
"You don't find this alarming ?"
"No. I'm actually kind of flattered."
"This is a very serious matter, Mr. Slater," Dr. McDermott said with her gaze bearing down on Jack. "This is a clear sign of latent mental illness that may manifest itself in violent ways. Doesn't it worry you that your son has such violent thoughts ?"
"Whoa...whoa....wait a minute...."
Dr. McDermott opened her laptop and pointed it towards Jack and Charlene. "I'm going to play the video of the interview I had with Tyler before you arrived," Dr. McDermott said rather coldly. "Maybe then, we can see if this is truly no big deal as your attitude seems to convey."
"Tyler, do you know why you're here ?"
"Mrs. Parks didn't like the picture I drew."
"No, that's not it Tyler. What you drew was very violent, and that makes us very sad. We don't like violence. Violence is bad."
"I drew a picture of my dad. He was in the Marines. When I get older, I want to be just like him."
"Tyler, what does your dad tell you about his time in the Marines ?"
"He says he hadda go to a place to find terrorists. He did, and I think he killed a bunch of them. He says that he was protecting our country."
Dr. McDermott paused the video. "What exactly do you tell your son about the war, Mr. Slater ?"
"I don't understand where you're going with this."
"It's a simple question."
Charlene stood up and glared at Dr. McDermott. "Jack Slater may be many things, but 'maladjusted' is not one of them. He was never depressed when he got home, even when he came back with one leg."
"If you don't mind me asking, why are you divorced ?"
"We're divorced because I never loved him. We only got married because I was pregnant, if you must know. The white picket fence, the dog in the yard, those were his dreams, not mine. I wanted excitement, he wanted to be Ward Cleaver."
"Has it ever occurred to you that Jack is hiding his emotions ? That he's suffering from post traumatic stress disorder in silence ?"
"The only time Jack Slater suffers any sort of distress is when one of the dishes he cooks doesn't get rave reviews, or his stupid vegetable garden is attacked by rodents."
Principal Ojeda stood up and adjusted her jacket. "Mr. and Mrs. Slater--"
"Watson....Watson," Charlene mumbled under her breath.
"I wish to inform you that, in accordance with the Freedom From Violence Act of 2015, I have alerted Child Services. They're going to come to your homes to do visits that will determine whether or not the two of you are fit parents. Then, we will have a hearing to determine whether or not Tyler should remain in your custody."
"Lady, you can kiss my a--." Jack snarled as he stood. The happy-go-lucky look that normally resided on Jack's face melted away. His face turned beet red. "You have no authority to do this! You wanna know why ? Tyler doesn't go this school anymore! I'll home school him if I have to."
With that, Jack stormed out of Principal Ojeda's office with Charlene in hot pursuit.
"What do you mean 'you'll home school Tyler' if you have to' ?" Charlene demanded. "What about the restaurant, genius ?"
"It doesn't matter. I'll sell my share to my partners and work as a chef somewhere else. I'll teach Tyler during the day and work at night."
Charlene caught up to Jack and grabbed his arm. "I want you to think about what you're doing. You're throwing away your dream."
"You're just worried that you'll have to be a mother and watching Tyler at night will put a crimp in your lifestyle. I guess you don't want to explain to your son who all those strange men are, huh ?"
Charlene was shocked by Jack's remark. Despite all he had been through and all she had done to him, he had never spoken that way to her.
"You b------..." Charlene began to mutter through clenched teeth. She stopped herself when she realized Jack was right. While she could never love him, at long last she respected him.
Jack and Charlene quickly walked over to the waiting area where Tyler was still sitting.
"Grab your stuff, Squirt. We're leaving and you'll never, ever have to come back to this dump again."
"Mr. Slater! You stop right there!" shouted Principal Ojeda, as she clumsily ran into the room in her high heels. "You do not have authorization to take that child off of this campus!"
"Oh yes I can! I have sole custody of him. Now slither back into your hole and see how many other families you can destroy with your psycho-babble."
Jack turned away from the principal only to see the security guard from the entrance of the school with a gun (with a clip that held 30 rounds) pointed at him. "I strongly suggest you calm down, sir," the guard said menacingly. "You're not taking that child anywhere. I will use force if I have to."
"This is my son," Jack replied. "I'm taking him out of this lunatic asylum and there's nothing you can do to stop me."
"I strongly suggest you step away from the child."
"Gangway or sickbay. You decide."
"I am counting to three. When I hit three, You had better be away from that child. One....two...."
Jack's training and instinct took over and in a fraction of a second, he slapped the guard's gun away. With a lightning punch, he knocked the guard out cold. Charlene slumped onto the nearest wall and slid down it. She covered her face and began weeping uncontrollably.
"Are you all right ?" Jack asked.
Charlene was too choked up to speak. She weakly pointed to a window that had a view of the parking lot. The SWAT team had arrived. The parking lot was now filled with police cars and the media.
"Oh my God," Jack muttered to himself.
The security guard started to regain consciousness. With lightning moves of his own, he grabbed the gun which was still lying on the floor. He fired a shot at Jack and missed. Jack quickly began a grapple with the guard. The two rolled around with Jack getting the upper hand. Jack grabbed the gun and pointed it at the guard. "I don't want to hurt you or anyone else! But I am taking my son out of here and there's nothing you or anyone else can do about it!" Jack shouted with tears streaming down his face.
Within moments, the SWAT team entered the waiting area. Immediately they opened fire on Jack, hitting him in the chest. The security guard rolled the mortally wounded Jack off of him.
"Daddy! Daddy!" Tyler shouted as he ran to his father. A SWAT team member stopped the boy and put him on his shoulder and carried him out of the room.
As Jack died, his life didn't flash before his eyes. He didn't think of his time in the Marines, nor did he think of Charlene. His last thoughts were of how much he loved his son and how he wouldn't let anything or anyone stand between them.
The years that followed the incident weren't kind to Tyler or Charlene. Tyler was placed in a psychiatric group home after Charlene overdosed on sleeping pills and died a month after the shooting. After aging out of the foster care system and a short period of homelessness topped off with heavy drug abuse, Tyler threw himself in front of a subway train. He was eighteen years old.
Maxine Ojeda and Theresa McDermott both wrote books about the incident and joined the talk show circuit. Ojeda ran for Congress as a liberal Democrat and won handily. One of her first priorities, she promised, was to shore up the Freedom From Violence Act of 2015 by introducing mandatory home visits by social workers every six months to households with children in public and private schools under the age of 18. It passed the House and Senate unanimously and became law in 2020.
Hat tip to TheOldLady for her valuable proofreading and help!
Really good! I think you may have started something.
I like the way Alan Levy thinks. Absolutely prestidigious.
True, but that wasn’t in Jack’s character.
I envisioned Jack as someone who was apolitical. I envisioned him as an ordinary Joe living a ho-hum life until his family was crushed by the Authoritarian Left.
Gosh, thank you FRiend!
Wow Absolutely, an absolutely stunning story. Completely believable as well. Thanks for sharing.
Why would anybody want to read something so depressing?
Is your purpose to inspire people with hope, or make them want to off themselves?
Alan Levy is my alter-ego.....I’m a salesman of middling worth by day and Right-Wing Avenger by night.....
All kidding aside, thanks for the kind words, FRiend!
Gosh, I don’t know what to say other than thank you.
Too bad Tyler couldn’t overcome the trauma of what these government hags did to him. A more satisfactory ending, for me, would be him as an adult delivering some payback, and letting them know why, not that they would get a real clue as to the error of their ways anyway.
My purpose was to make people think. Nothing more, nothing less.
What we're trying to figure out is how to stop it.
I like this ending better:
Jack, recognizing from his military training he was behind enemy lines, played the poor traumatized soldier for the principal and doctor, agreeing with everything they said. He left the school that day with orders to attend sensitivity training along with anger management counseling, which he did for the next several weeks.
Surprisingly, after the school’s ‘Winter Solstice’ break, neither the principal nor the school’s psychologist returned for work. They had both gone away on vacation and nobody ever heard from them again. Jack ran for local office and won several elections, which eventually led to a successful run for Congress. He was always known as a very calculating, intelligent person, and he was instrumental in overturning several years’ worth of poor legislation.
That is very believable, unfortunately
In the original version of this story, Tyler grows up and runs for the Senate with intention to have the “Freedom From Violence Act of 2015” repealed.
I changed the ending because I wanted to illustrate just how insidiously evil liberalism and how it destroys those it claims to help.
Is it an unhappy ending ? Yes. Does liberalism ever create happy endings ? No.
“Everybody here already knows where we’re headed.”
True, but reminders never hurt.
I suspect you made a good point, but couldn't read the thing. Brevity is the soul of wit; this runs some 2,260 words -- give or take.
The usual newspaper editorial is limited to 600-700 words.
Bookmarked for a later read. Thank you!
Very well written and “readable”. And sadly could be a look into our not to distant future.
Greatly appreciated! Thank you, FRiend!
It’s pretty short. I guess it could be just one small part of a book showing how this country ends up in a civil war or something.
Travis McGee would..er... will be proud.
As I stated earlier, I envisioned Jack as your everyday Joe. That wouldn’t be in his character.
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I have this odd feeling we’ll see how realistic it is rather soon. I don’t see Boehner or McConnell stepping up to the plate and fighting the intrigues of the Evil Left anytime soon.
No they won’t and pointing it out will just make them sad. :p
It’s a short story, not an editorial. I don’t usually write fiction. It’s too time consuming.
Thanks for the kind words, FRiend!
I do appreciate that, but I have many ‘everyday Joe’ neighbors who were also former trigger pullers. They all think very differently than your everyday Simpleton.
My beautiful wife, Mrs. Absolutely Nobama, wants me to turn this into a script for one of those Lifetime Original Movies. While I certainly appreciate her vote of confidence, I don’t think it would ever see the light of day as a book or a screenplay, unless I made Jack “Jackie” and turned him into an angry LGBT loon striking back at a religious school....
Greatly appreciated, FRiend!
Thank you, FRiend!
>>They had both gone away on vacation and nobody ever heard from them again.<<
I really LOL at that!
I like your ending.
You got that right! LOL!!
I actually had the same thought as your better half re:movie script. So that is two votes.
It would be a labor of love to expand the story line..but I think it could sell.
Maybe not to Lifetime. Not enough emotional drama, i.e. wife poisons husband, husband has multiple wives, or pregnant teen etc.
I agree with you, they’d never make it “our” way
As do I. But like I said, it just wasn’t in Jack’s character. We’re all individuals.
Maybe. One never knows....
Thanks once again!
I’ve written stories, I never seem to finish them
I did finish this one:
Good psychological portrait of the characters in the coming American tragedy.
I wish the outcome were different for Jack and Tyler, but this is the true one. Nothing to add or subtract.
Oh great, some quarterwit from DU will read this and get ideas.
I bookmarked that link for a later read. Looks good!
Thanks for the kind words, FRiend!
It did and I'm thinking about YOUR mental health......just sayin
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