I also see that in your story, a poor down trodden minority individual is missing. If you're going to write a story about the evilness of capitalism your story needs a victim; they should look minority, depressed, cold, tired and surrounded by gloom.
Your evil tormentor should look bright, smug, powerful, and cozy in his expensive suit.
We have to stop thinking minimum wage jobs are supposed to provide a living wage. It is simply not possible. The story should tell us that progressive policies have destroyed the manufacturing jobs base in America. The place where lower skilled workers could earn a living wage.