Posted on 03/03/2003 2:48:36 PM PST by Alec Mouhibian
And your spelling is pathetic! (With critics like these, who needs sycophants?)
1. Anyone who quotes Thomas Sowell approvingly has my interest/approval. Professor Sowell has written quite a few books, and I've read the majority of them.2. But until I spotted the extended Sowell quote I was skimming mighty fast, like a hard rain after a long drought--nothing was really sinking in. In such cases, effectively, I count on the comments of other Freepers to give me the gist of the article, and help me get interested in any unusual points it of interest it may have. Without the prospect of that aid, I might easily have decided not to bother trying to penetrate it.
3. The conclusion of the matter is that form dominates substance in all the remarks about this article. Few were able to give the article its due, those who did seemed to like it but did not cite a particular point for discussion.
4. One of the things that makes writing difficult is that we tend to fall in love with our own words, and to be unwilling to drop any onto the cutting-room floor. If something needs to be shorter, and you think that's impossible, you just may have to resort to a blank page and write that part again from scratch. Another trick I learned late in life is that if a paragraph says just what you want to say but just won't flow right, try putting the last sentence first.
5. Several comments advocated simplifying the language. You should use "use" instead of utilizing "utilize" whenever possible.
I agree pretty much with the others, but its perhaps not as bad as they say. I would split this essay up into parts. Don't worry so much about the "tough words" that others complained about, just back it off a bit. If another, more common word will suffice, then go ahead and use it, no one will think you are dumber for it.
I am amazed that any child thinks about these things (hey, you are a KID for 3 more days!). I was a half brained idiot (genius IQ, but a liberal, public-skool edjukated idiot). Keep it up! I can't wait to see your output after a few years, you may be the next, young, William Buckley.
Speak for yourself.
Back when I was 17 I was an extremely focued (as it were) young punk.
Focused on every gal who wore a tight pair of jean(cutoffs), Dodge Dart Swinger 340s, R&R groups or a myriad of other things I thought merited priority over my German Shepard short attention span.
(Could spot any one or combination of those things at a considerable distance too, I'll have you know.)
I'll tell you what I wasn't doing, OK?
I sure in the hell wasn't writing about sociology, psychology, political science or any other matters I knew absolutely nothing about.
Nope, no way.
...I waited until I got older, to do that.
I don't base my worth on their system either , but see it draining our lives away.
Not that I'm worth more with their FRN's than without. But with their system our level of existence is determined by them.
I used to swallow the crap that you get what you work for , but not anymore.
Their system is designed to take everything from us and the harder we work the more they take.
If they can't get it by sending our jobs out of the country ( paid for with our TAX FRN's ), they will use Bush to take away our overtime pay , they will drain irrigation water from our farms as in Klamath Falls or they will flood our farms as in Florida making it worthless , or make it a buffer zone around federal land , or claim it through heritage site programs cities sign to get federal money.
But like fools American's keep running to the thieves for answers , and they always have them.
What was it that the spider said to the fly? Or the scorpion to the frog?
It's their nature plain and simple. And it's past time for some BUG SPRAY!!!!!!!!
I think that you have made some very keen observations.
Here's just one that stood out.
"Nevertheless, hypocrisy is a miniscule vice when compared to the rest of their depravity, and its isolated exposition also enables the false illusion that those who are not hypocrites are any less reprehensible."
That's a point that I think gets lost in the heat of debate.
I see conservatives (myself included) get worked up over the latest hypocracy by the left, forgetting that the real danger lies in their consistencies.
As for your writing style, I would have found it easier to read if you had used simpler language.
I also noticed a tendency to overuse emotionally loaded terms and labels when talking about people.
It tends to detract from the credibility of an article if the author shows a lot of bias.
The points you make are good ones and do plenty to show the absurdities of the left.
Leave the name calling to those without reason or logic on their side.
All in all, a good job.
Better than I could have done as a highschool senior... or even now.
Hope to see more of your writing :-)
There was no misspelling; the title the young man chose did not incorporate the body of his work.
As for the remainder of your diatribe, the less said the better.
Seems we're seeing things from the same view. The bug spray stays in the closet, unless they come after me or mine.
It would be nice if they'd drink their own kool-aid. 'twould make the bug spray obsolete...
Other reading says that the chemicals/germs amount to about 3-5 days of hell then you die. Anthrax can be beat with Cipro if it's ingested or through a cut. But if inhaled , it's over. Some say that if your taking colloidal silver for a few months before an attack you can survive (anthrax).
I was watching a show on poisonous animals , when they got to a salamander that has botulism in it's skin they went to a little clip in Iraq showing hundreds of bombs. They said that Saddam has enough botulism to kill the world four times over.
I don't think America will sit this one out.
It's not going to take very long to find out.
Take Care
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