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"The Checkpoint: New Fiction from the War on Domestic Terrorism"
www.sit-rep.com ^ | March 6, 2002 | Travis McGee

Posted on 03/06/2002 11:01:20 PM PST by Travis McGee

Brad and Ranya finished driving over the five mile I-664 James River Bridge-Tunnel from Newport News and crossed back onto the land on the northern tip of Suffolk County Virginia at a little past four pm. In a few minutes they’d be back at the Portsmouth boatyard where they’d left her Yamaha, and Ranya still hadn’t decided yet if she was going back to her dismal one bedroom apartment hideout in East Oceanview, or if she was going to take Brad up on his offer to spend another night aboard his sailboat “Guajira” anchored out on the creek up in Poquoson. She felt her discipline draining away, her sense of mission receding. What future could she have with Brad? What was the point? He was leaving. She’d given herself willingly to a man who she knew was leaving.

But what harm could there be in spending a few days with him? If he helped her to find “George”, who knows, perhaps after that she’d give up the chase and sail down to the islands with him, which was probably the smart thing to do anyway. Sooner or later the FBI might pick up her trail; as careful as she’d been she was wise enough to know it was not possible to cover every track.

“I need to get gas” he told her, and pulled over onto the exit lane for Hoffler Boulevard. The exit ramp cut through a break in the wall of scrub pines alongside the highway, then curved off out of sight to the right and sloped gently downward. “Oh shit, what’s this?” Brad said, quickly braking.

Ranya bolted upright and quickly buckled her seatbelt. There was a cop car on the gravel shoulder of the ramp just past the trees; a cop was standing in the middle of the ramp holding up both hands, blocking Brad’s pickup truck and two cars in front of him.

“Checkpoint!” Ranya said. “One of Sanderson’s FIST checkpoints, it’s got to be.” The FIST program, for “Firearms Inspections Stop Terrorism” was the brainchild of Virginia Commonwealth’s Attorney Robert Sanderson. He had come down to Norfolk to announce and promote the program on Friday, he was shot and killed Saturday, and on Sunday Brad and Ranya were seeing one of his FIST checkpoints first hand. Ranya experienced a sudden flush of terror, and grabbed her daypack off the floor of the truck, then calmed slightly when she remembered that she had stashed her scoped Thomson Contender single shot .223 “pistol” back at her apartment before going sailing with Brad. Thank God for that! She’d almost skipped going back to her apartment before going out on Guajira, and if she hadn’t, the Contender would be in her bag at this moment. For the FBI, finding that gun would have been better than a signed confession. But she did have her dad’s custom .45….

“Brad, I’m sorry I didn’t tell you, but I’ve got a pistol with me.”

“Oh Christ. Okay, it should be all right, I think they’re just looking for rifles…..I hope.”

“Me too.”

The exit ramp made a slight right then left “S” curve as it descended through brush down to Hoffler Boulevard. There were large stop signs on both sides of the end of the ramp at Hoffler, which passed under the I-664 overpass off to the left. Halfway down the ramp, parked along the right shoulder, there was another police car, then a line of eight or ten civilian cars and SUVs, then two more police cars. Orange traffic cones divided the wide ramp down the middle. Police and camouflage clad soldiers were walking alongside the row of parked cars; some of the cars had open doors and trunks. A single slow moving motorcyclist was being waved past the line of cars to proceed on his way, a fact which Ranya noted with great interest. Obviously the police did not think a motorcyclist could be concealing a banned semi auto or sniper rifle.

Two hundred yards away at the bottom of the ramp, parked off to the left in the weeds and facing uphill towards them was a desert painted Army humvee.

“Damn, look at that!” said Brad. “The humvee’s got a machine gun on it! I’ve never seen that before, not in the states!”

“I’ve seen it, up around DC sometimes, near the Pentagon and Reagan National, during security red alerts. They were there all the time after 9-11, usually they had a 50 caliber mounted, that gun looks smaller.” A helmeted soldier’s head and torso was visible sticking out of the humvee’s roof behind the pintle mounted machine gun.

“They sure picked a perfect spot for a checkpoint; I didn’t see anything until it was too late.” said Brad.

“Yeah, very sneaky. I’ve seen them set up this way searching for drugs a few times.”

“I wonder if they’re checking every car, or if they’re letting some pass around. I wonder if they’ll hassle us.”

“A thirty year old white guy in a red pickup truck? What do you think? They’re not looking for guys named Mohammed down here; they’re looking for guys named Bubba.”

“I guess we’ll find out in a minute.”

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The young father in the blue Chevy Lumina, the second car from the front of the line, said “No sir, I won’t open my trunk without a warrant, and I do not ‘consent’ to be searched.”

The Virginia National Guard corporal standing outside his driver’s side window looked around, confused. This had not come up before. Could this guy just refuse? Was that allowed?

The holdout’s young blond wife said “Martin, just do like he says, don’t make trouble, the girls are frightened.”

“Honey, it’s the point of it. This is still America, and there’s still a Constitution.”

“Daddy, why are there soldiers here? Is there a war?” asked seven year old Danielle from the back seat. Her four year old sister Ashley next to her in her booster seat sucked her thumb, afraid without knowing why.

“No sweetie, there’s no war. The soldiers are helping the police to look for some bad men.”

“Criminals daddy?”

“That’s right sugar, criminals.”

Another man walked up to their window. Martin Palmer could not tell if he was from the military or the police: he was dressed from his helmet to his boots in nothing but black, with no badge or insignia in sight. The man in black rapped on his driver’s side window with the steel muzzle tip of his black submachine gun. “Open up! Get out! Now!”

“Do you have a warrant? What’s your ‘probable cause’ to search our car?” Martin Palmer was trying very hard not to show the fear he felt, holding onto the wheel to keep his hands from visibly shaking. He hoped he did not sound as afraid as he felt, he remembered the Eagle Scout in Maryland who had had his face shot off point blank by an FBI undercover agent with an M-16 rifle after a mistaken traffic stop.

“My ‘probable cause’ is you’re an asshole who refuses to give consent for a search, that’s what! Now get out! Out! Out!”

******************************************************

BATF Special Agent Alvin Bogart was having a bad day and now he was angry enough to chew up barbed wire and spit out nails. He was angry because it was Sunday afternoon, and he was pulling the absolute shit duty of all time manning a FIST checkpoint, instead of kicking back on his recliner in his den with a cold Budweiser in his hand watching the Steelers play the Rams. For this he had become a Federal Law Enforcement Officer?

He was angry because he was pulling his third consecutive day of twelve hour shifts, which really meant a 14 hour work day, only with no overtime pay like the State Troopers were raking in, and he knew that he had to do it again tomorrow and it looked like forever. If he had wanted to pull this kind of shit duty, he would have joined the Border Patrol!

He was angry because he had to walk around all day in full tactical gear in almost 90 degree heat, including his Kevlar helmet and body armor, carrying his MP-5 as if they were expecting a head on terrorist attack right here in Hicksville Suffolk Virginia. This was at Sanderson’s direct orders, Sanderson who was not even in his Federal chain of command, Sanderson who was now dead, Sanderson who had never worn heavy body armor and tactical gear under the sun on a hot day in his life. He would never admit it aloud, but just for this alone Bogart was glad that preppie Sanderson had had his head blown off on the golf course yesterday.

He was extremely angry because he’d earlier today heard through unofficial federal law enforcement back channels that a brother ATF agent had been killed in the line of duty last night, shot in the neck by some redneck asshole during a raid not five miles from where he was standing.

And now Alvin Bogart was positively livid because this curbside Allen Dershowitz in the piece of shit Chevy wanted to give him a lecture on the 4th Amendment, consent searches, and probable cause. Like he needed to hear that line of crap! Like all ATF men, Alvin Bogart had a special burning hatred for “constitution fanatics”.

“So you refuse to give voluntary consent for a search of your vehicle, is that correct?”

“Yes sir, that is correct. Under the 4th amendment of the Bill of Rights of the Constitution…..”

The blue Chevy’s driver side window was rolled half way down. Turned slightly, BATF agent Alvin Bogart had casually slipped the small can of pepper spray from his belt unnoticed, and then he snapped it up and sprayed Mr. Martin Palmer, U.S. citizen and taxpayer, straight in his shocked face. Then as Martin Palmer screamed and dug at his eyes, Bogart snaked his arm down the half open window, pulled up the lock, and jerked open the door. As Palmer’s wife and daughters screamed both in terror and from the effects of the pepper spray being released inside the car, agent Bogart grabbed Palmer by his hair and shirt and pulled him halfway out, until he snagged up on his seatbelt. Bogart unsnapped the belt, and then used both hands to jerk Palmer all the way out onto the asphalt where his head hit with a satisfying smack.

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The Rest of the Story.


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This sixty second chapter takes place thirteen hours after the action described in "The Raid". This is the second and last excerpt from my novel, which I hope to finish before summertime 2002.
1 posted on 03/06/2002 11:01:20 PM PST by Travis McGee
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2 posted on 03/06/2002 11:03:49 PM PST by Mo1
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To: Joe Brower;harpseal;squantos;wardaddy;PatrioticAmerican;nunyabidness;pocat;SevenDaysInMay...

3 posted on 03/06/2002 11:06:11 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
bump


4 posted on 03/06/2002 11:07:52 PM PST by razorback-bert
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To: Travis McGee; Inspector Harry Callahan
I'm glad I stayed up tonight. Good stuff.
5 posted on 03/06/2002 11:12:04 PM PST by nunya bidness
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To: Freedom007;Eagle Eye;M1991;KO5A;300winmag;ScreamingFist;Kaylar;from occupied ga;M Kehoe;Badray...
Ping.
6 posted on 03/06/2002 11:13:07 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Jeff Head;Poised Woman;Poohbah;Liberty Ship;paul 51;zon;blackbag;T.R.Bigstick;sport;VRWC minion...
Ping.
7 posted on 03/06/2002 11:18:00 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
COOL!!

I hope someone sends Ashcroft a copy and whoever is in charge of airport security...

8 posted on 03/06/2002 11:20:19 PM PST by GeronL
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To: Travis McGee
That officers' badge number is covered up??
9 posted on 03/06/2002 11:21:00 PM PST by GeronL
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To: Travis McGee
Bump from former Sergeant-in-Charge of Checkpoint Charlie.
10 posted on 03/06/2002 11:23:02 PM PST by Born on the Storm King
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To: JohnHuang2;Sabertooth;Darth Sidious
BUMP

I wonder if anyone see's this in the right font?

11 posted on 03/06/2002 11:25:37 PM PST by GeronL
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To: GeronL;Travis McGee
Thanks for the ping -- bookmarking
12 posted on 03/06/2002 11:26:32 PM PST by JohnHuang2
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To: Born on the Storm King
Cool! were you there when the Wall came down?
13 posted on 03/06/2002 11:26:51 PM PST by GeronL
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To: JohnHuang2
How many people do you suppose see's the wingding font??
14 posted on 03/06/2002 11:27:26 PM PST by GeronL
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To: Chapita;B4ranch;sneakypete;river rat;double tap;Bedford Forrest;big ern;ctdonath2;AKbear;Abundy...
"The Raid: New Fiction from the War On Domestic Terrorism"
15 posted on 03/06/2002 11:29:03 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: GeronL
View->Page Source
16 posted on 03/06/2002 11:32:07 PM PST by HiTech RedNeck
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To: CJ Wolf;T Wayne;zeugma;Denver Ditdat;BluesDuke;alphadog;ChareltonHest;Mikey;nightdriver...
Ping.
17 posted on 03/06/2002 11:34:51 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: HiTech RedNeck
I know, I know.

How about we come up with a FReeper font, a new code that changes periodically... downloadable... we paste them as images (gif, bmp)

LOL... casual visitors would wonder what drugs we're on

18 posted on 03/06/2002 11:35:02 PM PST by GeronL
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To: Lazamataz,Howie;Registered;lowbridge;Thumper 1960;HoustonCurmudgeon;Melinator;jackbill;FreePaul...
Ping.
19 posted on 03/06/2002 11:39:52 PM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
Cool Travis, I'll definitely buy a copy if all the BATF guys end up like these two:))))thx for the ping
20 posted on 03/07/2002 12:07:43 AM PST by monday
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To: GeronL
Ah yes, airport security... keeping America safe from rabid fundamentalist manicurists.

And other 'security' measures...just the Federal government's way of taking the fight out of its citizens. We mustn't have citizens struggling against terrorists to prevent a greater disaster when they should sit like docile hens in their seats waiting for an approved badged wonder to pop up and save them. (Of course, it was that cooperate and wait for rescue mentality which made 9/11 possible, but we're not supposed to figure that out.)

Knowing the gov, it will hire Islamic militant immigrants under affirmative action to be air marshalls, in addition to the illegal immigrant A&P guys and the high school dropouts on gate security.

21 posted on 03/07/2002 12:09:51 AM PST by piasa
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To: Born on the Storm King
Checkpoint Charlie: I was there in 1980. "You are leaving the American Sector" in four languages as I recall. Cool museum there as well. Great graffiti all over the wall on our side. We took a bus across to shop, you had to change Dmarks for OstMarks at one to one, a real ripoff. We bought cheap Bulgarian wine, and gave the rest of the Ost Marks to the east German kids before we came back out.
22 posted on 03/07/2002 12:12:17 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: GeronL
They wouldn't get it, they'd just read it as an insult to our fine "boys in black".

They'd need to get shot in the face with an FBI agent's M-4 assault rifle at a mistaken traffic stop to get it.

23 posted on 03/07/2002 12:18:12 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
hhhhmmmm. What do you think about using Xlibris to publish a book of FReeper short stories/novella's??

OK, never mind

24 posted on 03/07/2002 12:24:17 AM PST by GeronL
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To: piasa
Now they're all unfire-able federal employees with an iron rice bowl union contract, so you know how THEY'RE all going to vote for the next 30 years.

The fact that our govt 6 months after 9-11 will STILL not trust ex military commercial airline pilots with pistols tells me all I need to know about what they really think about us peasants.

But they'll assign F-16s to shoot down errant jetliners and kill all aboard, that's okay, the F-16 jockey is a current govt employee.

25 posted on 03/07/2002 12:24:36 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: GeronL
That can work, why not?

It just happens that my two stories are already part of one novel, so we'll see how that goes publishing wise.

26 posted on 03/07/2002 12:26:14 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
I know that your stories, wait, you mean the chapters right? or are there other stories I don't know about??
27 posted on 03/07/2002 12:29:59 AM PST by GeronL
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To: Travis McGee
This takes a long time to load but it is worth it for a grin. I think the captain found a new way to swab the decks.
28 posted on 03/07/2002 12:33:44 AM PST by piasa
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To: monday
There are plans to make it the BATFFC. The Bureau of alcohol, Tobacco, Firearms and Fingernail Clippers.
29 posted on 03/07/2002 12:36:41 AM PST by piasa
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To: Travis McGee
I remember one time I went to Alexander Platz in East Berlin in the 1980's. My friend bet me I couldn't drink $1 of beer at 10 cents a mug, and I couldn't!

Checkpoint Charlie at night was something else. I sat there many a night all alone, and I could not believe it! The British and French would go to sleep, and the Americans and Germans would stay awake. The Albanians had a "penthouse" nightclub right on the street, and they would often party ALL NIGHT LONG! I used to hassle their asses, knowing full well the German Polizei would back me up in a heartbeat. BTW, I was always unarmed at CCP (I know you're a 2nd Amdt advocate as I am,) and I learned how to use my mouth (I also was the Russian translator for the MPs.) I have my concealed weapons permit, but I generally never carry my weapon. But, as I grow older and frailer, I'll probably get my a$$ kicked, so I'll start carrying my weapon---it's a tough life---hah! hah!

30 posted on 03/07/2002 12:43:43 AM PST by Born on the Storm King
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To: Born on the Storm King
Govaritzie po Russkii?

"Vui Vuizzhaetze Iz Amerikanskova Sectora", remember that!

31 posted on 03/07/2002 12:47:29 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
Once again, outstanding!

Would it be safe to say that the kid getting shot in MD is a recent addition?

32 posted on 03/07/2002 12:50:17 AM PST by NoCurrentFreeperByThatName
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To: Born on the Storm King
We went over to East Berlin as a group, all in Naval uniforms on a US Army bus. (Those were some bizarro days!)

We had lunch and very nice inexpensive Czeck "Pilsener Urquell" beer in a "club" type bar/restaurant. The maitre'd's steered us to specific tables, we gave them a hard time, "no, we'd like to sit over there", "No, I am sorry, that table is no good, you must sit here."

So the entire lunch, getting buzzed on cheap great beer, we talked to the hidden microphones, telling what a homosexual Lenin was, how he did it with farm animals, and so on.

33 posted on 03/07/2002 12:52:30 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: NoCurrentFreeperByThatName
Would it be safe to say that the kid getting shot in MD is a recent addition?

Very safe assumption.

34 posted on 03/07/2002 12:53:49 AM PST by Travis McGee
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To: Travis McGee
bttt
35 posted on 03/07/2002 1:49:55 AM PST by Chapita
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To: Travis McGee
God bless Luke Tanner and all those of like Spirit.
36 posted on 03/07/2002 2:25:54 AM PST by spunkets
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To: piasa
Great site!
37 posted on 03/07/2002 3:05:56 AM PST by B4Ranch
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To: Travis McGee
ROTFLMAO!!! How could you be so cruel to Lenin ?? LOL Great post, shame it's just around the corner.
38 posted on 03/07/2002 3:09:09 AM PST by B4Ranch
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To: Travis McGee
LOL !!!!!!

So the entire lunch, getting buzzed on cheap great beer, we talked to the hidden microphones, telling what a homosexual Lenin was, how he did it with farm animals, and so on.

39 posted on 03/07/2002 3:10:29 AM PST by Donald Stone
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To: 68-69TonkinGulfYatchClub;Snow Bunny;Black Jade
ping
40 posted on 03/07/2002 3:10:46 AM PST by B4Ranch
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To: Travis McGee
thanks for the read. nice touch adding recent real-world events.
now, log off FR and get back to writing, so we can all buy the book! dangit :-)
41 posted on 03/07/2002 3:28:51 AM PST by fnord
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To: Travis McGee
"I want you dead, Fritz."

Gripping stuff, Travis.

42 posted on 03/07/2002 4:06:34 AM PST by Dukie
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To: fnord, Travis McGee
log off FR and get back to writing, so we can all buy the book!

Seconded! $;-)

I plan on buying several copies as "gifts" for my friends and relatives for birthdays, Christmas, etc. I have an older sister, an English teacher who's written a few books herself, who's always harping on me to "read some fiction instead of tech journals and political nonfiction"! I'm sure she'll be glad to see I'm taking her advice...


43 posted on 03/07/2002 4:14:55 AM PST by Joe Brower
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To: GeronL
I can see the font, "Wingdings", no problem. I'm running WinNT4 SP6a and IE 5.5, FYI.

And I wasn't on-site when the wall fell, but I watched it on TV...

44 posted on 03/07/2002 4:18:30 AM PST by Joe Brower
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To: Travis McGee
Thanks for the ping sir. Some excellent writing as well... can't wait for the whole book.
45 posted on 03/07/2002 4:40:43 AM PST by WALLACE212
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To: Travis McGee
Good work, glad I logged on again tonight to see it.

You know you have done it now, don't you? Now that you've dangled the carrot out there and gotten us all excited, every second post you see is gonna be somebody asking when it is gonna be finished. :-)

Ruck

46 posted on 03/07/2002 4:50:47 AM PST by Have Ruck - Will Travel
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To: Travis McGee
Absolutely outstanding. See your FreepMail for some comments.

Stay well - Stay safe - Stay armed - Yorktown

47 posted on 03/07/2002 4:55:17 AM PST by harpseal
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To: Travis McGee
This sixty second chapter takes place thirteen hours after the action described in "The Raid". This is the second and last excerpt from my novel, which I hope to finish before summertime 2002.

Great stuff! REALLY looking forward to the whole enchilada! Jeff Head; now Travis...FR authors rock!



48 posted on 03/07/2002 5:24:21 AM PST by who knows what evil?
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To: Travis McGee
Good work! Thanks for flagging me, I will send a link to my CHP brother-in-law. The most curious part of the JBT situation is the way they are able to hide. They are almost impossible to find when they are off duty. I think I have one living next door to me.

He hides his face when I walk by, won't talk, has some very suspicious looking things in his back yard and is damn sure hiding from the law or from his past deeds.

49 posted on 03/07/2002 6:08:03 AM PST by Howie
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To: Travis McGee
Outstanding scene.

Of course, I have known a couple guys who use pepper spray as a breath mint...swim buddies of yours, maybe? ;o)

50 posted on 03/07/2002 6:12:47 AM PST by Poohbah
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