“Sorry, but the vocabulary and writing style are about 10 grade levels above your average supermarket crowd...”
Yes. You need to read and re-read Strunk & White’s “Elements of Style” until you completely internalize it.
Writing professionally takes a thick skin. 90% of what everyone writes is crap. If you don’t like being called on it, you’re in the wrong field.
Your introduction could be re-written as one 4-5 sentence paragraph and would be the better for it. Writing is a two - part process. First, you write in order to figure out what it is you want to say. Then, you figure out the best way to say it. Your intro is a rant, not a finished product, but that’s OK - you’re still in part one.
I’ve worked as an editor for thirty years. I know how the process works. You’ve got a lot of work ahead of you. If you choose to stick it out, good luck, and Godspeed.
Yes, exactly. I am in the “figuring out what to say” stage, no question. First draft is serving also the purpose of actually getting momentum of the process going.
I find that the real writing discipline takes hold as I see the printout pile getting thicker.
Skin too, especially with Freepers doing the input. Grin.