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To: ConservativeStatement

I already dissected this poem on the Tribune and they immediately took the comment section down.

Here are the things a competent writer and poet WOULD NOT DO:
1. Have a poem with 10 lines of simple description followed by 2 meandering lines of political declarations. Sandburg would strive for unity as he does with any “message poem.” Compare “Always the Mob” to this poem.

2. “unmistakable ultimatums”??? Yuk! Disgusting and worthless alliteration.

3. The condensed series “hunger,fear,revenge,robbery,hide behind it” includes hide as part of the series.

4. “It is less subtle and treacherous than one or ten lawyers.” Really? Do you mean less subtle yet MORE treacherous?

5. Repetitive “it”s and “nor”s that are very neophyte.

Sorry, folks. Looks like THE SOCIAL WORK RETIRED PROFESSOR wrote the poem. It’s a high school creative writing poem submission, not Sandburg.


16 posted on 01/22/2013 8:25:04 AM PST by struggle (http://killthegovernment.wordpress.com/)
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To: struggle
I am almost certain someone challenged the authenticity in the Trib's comments section and was called a conspiracy loon by an "open-minded, DIEverse and tolerant" libber.
17 posted on 01/22/2013 8:32:00 AM PST by ConservativeStatement (Obama is the "Disco Duck" president. A no-substance novelty that reached number one.)
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