[ConservativeMan55]

I'm working on the spelling and grammar stuff. I'm hoping to be a journalist. What stuck out to you as far as spelling and grammar?

[Consort]

...as far as spelling and grammar?

Just a couple of things:

camoflauge = camouflage
its = it's
ok = OK
"over the edge." = "over the edge?"
'pandered' = "pandered"

There may be others. I hope it helps.