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There was a commie named Kerry
Whose face was so long it was scary
He said with a grin
While draging his chin
If I Am Elected the terrorists will all be merry

Complements of Hells Canyon....
3,450 posted on 09/30/2004 10:23:24 PM PDT by hcgothic
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To: hcgothic
There was a commie named Kerry
Whose face was so long it was scary
He said with a grin
While draging his chin
If I Am Elected the terrorists will all be merry

I like the sentiment, but the meter in lines 1 and 5 is attrocious. First line needs an extra syllable somewhere before "commie"; either "There ONCE was a..." or "There was a mad commie...". The last line is suitably anapestic but two feet (six syllables) too long; I don't see any good remedy unless you want to include a self-effacing jab about the meter: "If I am elected I must be respected; I'll do nought but talk and at actions I'll balk, so the terrorists will all be merry."

Not to be pedantic, but metrical problems are a pet peeve of mine.

3,493 posted on 09/30/2004 10:37:09 PM PDT by supercat (If Kerry becomes President, nothing bad will happen for which he won't have an excuse.)
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