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"Her cruel faithless husband now wants her dead,
To MARry anOTHer WIFE."
- short line, emphasis, very similar to "the fairest of all the sights" in the original.
"And they could get on with life."
"Sordid" is good. 'cause that's what it is.
I'd leave out "in this quest" - just name the names:
"Michael Schiavo, George Felos, and Judge Greer
Are fighting with all their might."
"They don't want to starve her because she's dying."
"NOT because TERri WON'T speak UP," This one is o.k. It works & it makes a good point.
Everything else looks fine to me.
Go for it!
I'd leave out "in this quest" - just name the names: "Michael Schiavo, George Felos, and Judge Greer Are fighting with all their might."
"it's CLEAR michael SCHAIvo, george FELos, and judge GREER..."