Those “lyrics” you posted by Eminem are atrocious. I could write better lyrics than that in less than an hour*. Angelou’s “poetry” may not be good but it’s a hell of a lot better than the idiotic garbage that Eminem and his moronic friends drivel out.
*I’m a part time musician and I get paid (sometimes) to write and play music.
Yeah, I’d LIKE to hear you try to fit lines like that into a meter, or rhyme words like “monster” and “Kirkpatrick.” I’ve no doubt your lyrics are more socially constructive, but that’s not what Eminem is aiming for.
Put it this way: You’re searching for words which rhyme with “debating,” “operating” and “contemplating.” You’re wanting to express that you are paradoxically both angry, and instinctively attractive to others. And if you can demonstrate bawdiness, all the better. Do you think of “on the rag’nd’ovulating?,” which also perfectly matches a rhythm of BDCD (’) ADCD?
No. And don’t say, “well, I’d never SAY something like that,” because even if you wanted to (and I accept you wouldn’t), the point is, unless your brilliantly gifted, you couldn’t. It’s simply brilliant rhyming.
But I’d certainly welcome a sample of your writing, because I’d love to know how good you are, and, if you really are quite good, I’d simply enjoy seeing a sample of FReeper talent.
(Don’t worry about losing intellectual property; if you haven’t copyrighted your lyrics, posting them would prevent someone else from claiming your words are theirs’.)