I know what you are saying but I still submit to you that this is conversational writing. Yes, this piece could have been cleaned up substantially and written much more succinctly with less redundancy. However, I don’t think she intended it to be that way. I felt as if she were talking directly to me, otherwise I don’t think I could have read it as quickly.
As I said, I read a lot of scholarly journals and articles.
Do you think maybe your issue is more with the subject matter or the writing? Just curious. Meanwhile, your own sentence was poorly written (e.g., “...are really greatly well written?”). If I were critiquing you, I would tell you to rewrite that sentence. Of course, on FR, it’s more about getting across our point and I’m not here to be the grammar police (I create enough of my own bad sentences and typos).
Conversational doesn’t have to mean poor grammar. This piece has both. 7 posted a great example.
Reread the excerpt I posted from the article. The light may go on regarding the "really greatly". You also, without realizing it, have supported my assertion. Then again it was nullified by the post to both of us from Dr. Kopp. He explained that this is a transcript from a spoken presentation. I was not aware of that until he posted it. It explains the awkwardness of the text.