A couple of things that would make your story more powerful.
First, mention the level of science that existed at time of the writing of the Bible. Since non-believers insist the Bible is made up, what scientific knowledge existed then that would have possibly caused the “writers” to think that the entire story began with a flash, that the earth was covered with water and the waters receded to form land, and that life began small, and got larger and larger until man appear. An awfully lot of lucky guesses for such an unscientific society.
And second, following the non believers idea that it was all made up, how come no other religions offers anything that remotely resembles what science today says happened? Hindus are a good example. Why does no other religions story of creation even come close the the current accepted scientific version?
The ‘writers’ of the Bible, with absolutely no science to guide them, made an incredible number of lucky guesses - or they had Somebody give them the answers.
Thank you for that. I will lean harder on that aspect for Genesis 2. Maybe, eventually, will re-write this one to expand and include more detail.
It is something, as I said, that pulled me back to God. Had the usual phase in my late teens where I did not believe. Was proudly (and aggressively) atheist.