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To: Fatuncle

>>> Fekri, dismissed as exaggeration and fantasy by most other Egyptologists, was determined to prove the writings were true and accurate. There. Better?

No. Too many miles between subject and verb. Unless there's a mistake, why don't you focus on content?


178 posted on 12/24/2006 11:30:33 AM PST by Hop A Long Cassidy
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To: Hop A Long Cassidy

>>>Unless there's a mistake, why don't you focus on content?

Oops, I missed the dangling participial phrase. Still, putting it between subject and verb doesn't fix it. It needs rewritten, but the meaning is clear enough. Maybe "Fekri's claims" instead of "Fekri."


179 posted on 12/24/2006 11:36:48 AM PST by Hop A Long Cassidy
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To: Hop A Long Cassidy
Fekri was determined to prove the writings, dismissed as exaggeration and fantasy by most other Egyptologists, were true and accurate.

Grammar, used to correctly structure a sentence, directs attention to content, and eliminates confusion.

Can I stop chewing the rugs now? LOL

180 posted on 12/25/2006 7:09:01 PM PST by Fatuncle (Of course I'm ignorant. I'm here to learn.)
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