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To: JoeProBono
A 7-year-old boy who called 911 from a locked bathroom while armed robbers threatened his parents hugged and high-fived on Wednesday the sheriff's dispatcher who took his call.

What an appalling sentence.

5 posted on 03/10/2010 5:21:21 PM PST by Sherman Logan ( .)
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7 posted on 03/10/2010 5:24:34 PM PST by JoeProBono (A closed mouth gathers no feet)
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To: Sherman Logan
That's what I thought. The term "run on" does come to mind. Also: punctuation is our friend.

A 7-year-old boy, who called 911 from a locked bathroom while armed robbers threatened his parents, hugged and high-fived on Wednesday the sheriff's dispatcher who took his call.

Better, but still a mess.

9 posted on 03/10/2010 5:28:56 PM PST by La Lydia
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