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To: AnAmericanMother

What would you think of adjusting lines 5: "her aDULterous HUSband now WANTS her DEAD"?


25 posted on 03/06/2005 7:07:38 PM PST by supercat (For Florida officials to be free of the Albatross, they should let it fly away.)
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To: supercat
Substitute UNfaithful for adulterous. That won't sing - "unfaithful" will (gets rid of the extra beat too).

We're actually trying to work a couple of different aspects here - singability and comprehension. Can't always get both, but I think this will go if you work it over thoroughly, then put it away for a little rest, then have another shot at it. You can't revise every detail at once. Sleep on it, it will come right.

27 posted on 03/06/2005 7:17:08 PM PST by AnAmericanMother (. . . Ministrix of ye Chace (recess appointment), TTGC Ladies' Auxiliary . . .)
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