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To: Cboldt; humblegunner
You get to go to JAIL. You get to go to JAIL. You get to go to JAIL. You get to go to JAIL. You ALL get to go to JAIL.

As a troll, Q needs work.

Oprah's "You get a new car" = five syllables.

Q's "You get to go to jail" = six syllables.

It's the "get to" that kills it. Too cumbersome. It needs to be snappy like Oprah's. Better to go less syllables than more, in this case. Either, "You get jail" or better,

You get thrown in jail"<

I know this might seem like a small thing to you guys, but over time, it's very important. Every word matters. I know these things.

The Riddler = Q

The Joker = Bagster

#HumblegunnerKnows

Bagster


723 posted on 08/15/2018 7:18:51 PM PDT by bagster ( "Even bad men love their mamas.")
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To: bagster

“You get a new car” and “You get to go to jail” have the same number of feet as in poetry, though. Say them both out loud in a rhymthmic manner and they have the same number of beats.


780 posted on 08/15/2018 8:21:23 PM PDT by little jeremiah (When we do not punish evildoers we are ripping the foundations of justice from future generations)
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To: bagster
Ahem.

Better to go less fewer syllables than more...

#pedanticmuch?

999 posted on 08/16/2018 7:14:08 AM PDT by pa_dweller (They never thought she would lose. BWAAAAHAAAHAAHAAaa!)
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To: bagster

There is truth in what you say, bagster. But I think Q did something masterfully poetic. When you break it down into two parts, each part accomplishes your goal:

1. you get to

2. go to jail

It’s both poetic and musical. The poetry is in the stark contrast between promise in the first part and punishment in the second. The music is in the ricochet rhythm between “you-get-to” and “go-to-jail.”


1,959 posted on 08/17/2018 10:39:42 PM PDT by reasonisfaith ("...because they received not the love of the truth, that they might be saved." (2 Thessalonians))
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