“In October, President Donald Trump will be visiting the Minneapolis district being represented by Rep. Ilhan Omar, D-Minn.”
I studied nothing but STEM stuff in college.
Yet, my non-liberal arts mind rewrites the painful lead: In October, President Donald Trump will visit the Minneapolis district represented by Rep. Ilhan Omar, D-Minn.
Sheesh.
“Yet, my non-liberal arts mind rewrites the painful lead: In October, President Donald Trump will visit the Minneapolis district represented by Rep. Ilhan Omar, D-Minn.”
SURPRISE!! As a retired lawyer, I agree. In fact one of the
main efforts of many bar associations is instructing their members in direct, clear writing that uses the active voice instead of the passive.