I Wrote A Children's Book
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I plan on getting it published in time for Christmas next year. It will be targeted for 7 to 11 year old children. A book to be read to them, and for them to read as they learn how. It will be an illustrated book, with pictures throughout it. So I will be looking for someone to draw the pictures for me since I will be dealing with copyright issues.
If anyone has any ideas that may help, by all means please let me know. I hope you enjoy the story.
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Unless you think that might involve copyright issues.
In which case, pop tart crumbs. More modern too.
Typo. Should be knew instead of new.
Typo. Missing a period after lost.
Women slaving away in the kitchen cooking while the men play cards? How in the world will a kid today be able to relate to a story from 1949? Today a kid would pull out his smartphone and use siri to find her way home or else just phone home and ask to get picked up.
What’s the lesson or purpose of the story and did you achieve it? Who is the audience?
Liked it. Believable story.
I liked the story very much. I’d like it better if the story specified that the dad was in the military. The scene with the snow,the dark, the cold and a lost little boy was set really well.
This was before Johnson and his "Great Society" agenda. When that passed I , as a youngster, noticed the effect it had on new residents.
Often I go by the apartment complex , " The Courts" and it is sad to see what has happened. Personal pride , for some, doesn't exist like it did in the past.
"The Courts" was a stepping stone until families acquired enough money to buy a home.
I enjoyed reading your story.
No doubt you prayed when you were lost. The HOLY SPIRIT must have directed your steps.
GOD hears our prayers and answers our prayers.
“He wasn’t lost at all!” = literally he “found himself”.
Ricky new . . .make that Ricky knew
I love your story!
I’m been working on a book, too, and I learned early on that almost every person I told about it wasn’t interested in anything I had to say and, instead of showing interest and asking questions, they gave advice and guidance without being asked to do so and without knowing enough about the story to give helpful advice.
After those experiences I realized that my story is exactly that: my story. Mostly I’m keeping it to myself. I share its progress with my husband and a few very close friends who are genuinely interested in my story and who have been encouraging and helpful and honestly critical.
I hope you continue to work on this book. Your story touched me. I think this can become a beautiful book and I hope that one day soon I can buy several for gifts!
Merry Christmas!
pax
P.S. I’m so sleepy that my eyes are crossing so please excuse anything nonsensical in this post! :-)
Cute story.
Why not illustrate it yourself? Go to an arts store, buy yourself some paints or colored pencils, or whatever, and go to town. Even if you think you cant draw, the illustrations doesnt have to be professional looking.
// Ricky’s heart sank into his chest as he realized he was completely lost. He was scared, cold, hungry, and lonely. He sat down on the steps of one of the buildings, and wondered if he would ever see his mom and family again. He would miss Christmas and no one would want him and his life would be over. //
Just came across your story. I love this paragraph, it is *so* like a little kid :-)
